scarlet

[blackpelt]

Name:scarletpaw

Gender:female

Clan:thunderclan

Rank:apprentice

Age:7 moons

Love life:none

History:one of my parents was a rouge while the other belonged to thunderclan who died fighting for thunderclan. i work hard to become a thunder clan warrior i clean out the dens, catch prey and guard thunderclans bourders. as a kit i wandered out of camp and got caught inbatween a battle were i almost lost an eye but thankfully i recovered. also as a kit i was small and ofton bullied by the other kits abd apprentices.
[
b]Description (long):[sleek black coat and peircing green eyes.

Description (short):sleek black cout like the night. piercing green eyes, that could cut a cut apart when mad by only using her eyes.
[
b]Personalityblackpaw is trustworthy and noble. she has a good sence of humor and is outgoing. she is proud and works hard to gain trust and acceptance. she is quick and fierce. her down fall is sympthey. she is kind and cant see a cat suffer

RP example:Blackpaws black coat shone in the moonlight. her eyes shone with intensity. she let out a slow angry hiss. and crouch down ready to pounce on the cat that lurked behind the bush. the toadstools covered the cats scent. and she wonderd if it was just the breeze. but then a orange cat ran out and pounced on top of her bringing her to the ground.

[>>[S]ilver]

Okie ... this needs help. First, when it says LONG, we mean long. A paragraph, or at least four sentances. I know it can be hard, but if you want her accepted ... also, your going to need some RP lessons before I can accept you. Make everything soing like your actually talking, and not just typeing onto a computer. Theres a spellcheck on ProBoards ... use it. Also, capatalize everything that would be normally capatilized, IE her name, the first letters after a sentance.